The opening with Mavi's dad shouting and the crash downstairs literally stopped me cold, it set the whole tone so raw and real. The way you wove love and pain together like they're "best friends" was haunting and powerful.
Then Chapter 1 just layered it even deeper. Tom's perspective is sharp but also heartbreaking, the way he just wants to greet his mom, and instantly pays for it... that guilt came off the page. The detail about the dollar-store deodorant actually made him feel so real, so human.
You've built such a heavy, complicated household here, it feels lived in, and I’m already hooked. Can't wait to see where you take it.