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misterpcs
Great work! I really like how you use dialogue to make the characters more realistic. ☺️

One suggestion…instead of announcing scene transitions with the phrase “we cut to,” see how it sounds without using it. 

For example, instead of “We cut to Alex who is just waking up, he checks his watch…”, try  “Alex wakes up and checks his watch.”

just a suggestion. You have a great imagination!🙌🏾
2 weeks agoReply
Pandomando26
Tysm :)
2 weeks agoReply
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