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Very nicely done Ciro, I got the creeps from the abandoned toy shop and yeah, Ravage fits in nicely there. I had to laugh as she was going down her wishlist of torcher tools and weapons. Definitely NOT the Guillotine but maybe the wheel, the seven tailed-cat whip, etc.
Ravage would still continue to call Talon Exit after his "new hair-cut" but it's still good.
Awesome chapter as always, Ciro. Keep it up! ^-^

4 years agoReply

omg I literally was debating on that exact line if she would call him Exit again or not xD I wasn't sure if she would but I'm glad you confirmed it!

4 years agoReply

@Ciro, by the by it seems the tune "Twisted" has become Ravage's theme when ever she appears ^-^ the music box scene was well written as she got lost in her thoughts while trying to recall her (human) past.

4 years agoReply

@Ernest_Scribbler, certainly has, it looks lol. Oh yeah, for the music box, I flipped on this to help inspire me: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=receJsYhSsk from SH2 👌 sad and creepy

4 years agoReply

@Ciro, I can see why and it fits nicely. 👍😊

4 years agoReply

Tenshi no Yami

First review of 2021!
So close to the hospital.... So close! When you describe the colorful place I was thinking of something like a chuck e. cheese at first due to the animatronic then FNAF 😶 Then there was confirmation it was a toy store and im like ok, cool. Then the lil nifty demon shows uo and I can't help but giggle as she rambles on what she wants 🤣

Then that thing happens and Im thinking the movie of "Small Soldiers" then got a chill. (Dont trust them kids or toys, especially dolls)

At any rate, wonderful chapter and I look forward to the next as usual Ciro.

4 years agoReply

@Tenshi no Yami Thanks Tenshi! I wrote the creepy toy store thing and thought, 'Ravage would be good here! Oh yeah, I remember FNAF. ' FNAF, Slenderman, SCP ... my goodness the memories, but SMALL SOLDIERS?!? I almost forgot about that movie! Ah, that brings me way back to the days of Blockbuster, Nintendo 64, and Kmart.👌

4 years agoReply

Tenshi no Yami

@Ciro, all the 90s kids creeping on hitting 30 and im like dang....we may be getting older but our childhood was lit 🔥
You killed me with the Kmart 🤣
That store is Target's equivalent in Guam

4 years agoReply

@Tenshi no Yami, so true on that Tenshi 😆

4 years agoReply

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