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Jessica

Wow, this is such an amazing story. I’ve never read a story with this much detail. One of the characters really stood out to me, and I have an interesting thought about them. Would you like to hear it?

1 month agoReply

墨消然

Thank you so much! I’d be happy to hear your thoughts. Which character stood out to you, and what idea did you have about them?

1 month agoReply

Jessica

@墨消然, I'm talking about Lin Hao and I have an interesting idea for him but can we coneect we connect in DM so there we can discuss freely?

1 month agoReply

墨消然

@Jessica,ok

1 month agoReply

Alright, I have read ch 1. Here's a summary:
What stands out:
· It reads like an action Asian film, from how I see, you have the ability to make a good filmaker.
· Your protagonist looks so cool as a one man show guy. Yeah.
· The fights are action and consistent
· The Unit 1 people are seemingly searching for him, making him an interesting wanted person protagonist.
What needs improvement:
· I've noticed you use American English ['''' centre as center], it's not like American English is bad, but for a learner like you, learn British English to avoid confusion.
· In the fight, unlike realism where he is mobbed up simultaneously, he fights one-on-one and the others are standing alone.
· You being a 中国人、you know Kung-Fu but I did not feel the Kung-Fu.

Over all, this issue is entertaining and feedback is subjective. I'm not in my leisure now, but I'll find time to read more.

1 month agoReply

墨消然

Thank you for taking the time to read the first chapter and give me such detailed feedback. This is actually my first attempt at writing a novel, so I’m still learning. I hope that as the protagonist grows throughout the story, I can also grow and improve as a writer.The fight scenes become more detailed and exciting in the later chapters. However, martial arts is not the only main focus of my story. I also want to explore everyday life, personal growth, and the emotional bonds between family members. Martial arts is an important part of the story, but it is also a way for me to show how the characters face life, relationships, and their own struggles.Thank you again for your honest feedback. I’ll keep your suggestions in mind as I continue improving the story.

In my personal understanding, kung fu is not only about visible techniques or fighting styles. It is also reflected in a person’s character, choices, and the way they face life. If you try to understand and appreciate the character, you may gradually see why they fight the way they do. That is where I believe the deeper beauty and subtlety of kung fu can be found.

1 month agoReply

@墨消然, Yeah. Can you kindly review my work? It's called Super Fighters ① Commander 100 Saga.

1 month agoReply

I trust ya! You know it better than I do! In fact, I can fight in Karate!

1 month agoReply

墨消然

@SF,I’m off tomorrow, so I can spend the whole day reading your work and giving you feedback.

1 month agoReply

@墨消然, 👍. Thanks. Have a good day.

1 month agoReply

Ariana45

I really enjoyed this chapter and now I'm curious to know what inspired this part of the story.

2 months agoReply

Lean

Very nice

2 months agoReply

Ellena woods

Hello,I came across your work and genuinely enjoyed it. Your storytelling, characters, and world-building really stood out to me, and I honestly think your stories would work amazingly as a manga or webtoon.Since you've already published books, it might be worth giving this format a chance too. Webtoons have a huge audience, and you can always look up WEBTOON to see how many writers have grown their readership through it.I’m a paid commission-based comic and manga artist. If you'd ever like to adapt your story into a comic while staying true to your original vision, I'd be happy to share my portfolio.Best regards,
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2 months agoReply

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